Stage Three vs Stage Four Writers…
What I am about to show you is not always the case. A lot of stage four writers, me included, often write simple, clear sentences when the character or the type of story, or the moment in the story demands it.
But I wrote this as a response to a writer working in the Power Words workshop. Young professional writers flat don’t know what Power Words are and often, because of workshops, think they are overwriting when they use them.
Early professional writers, stage three, can’t even see Power Words most of the time.
So first let me give you an example of a Dean Koontz sentence. (He is a stage four writer.)
“She boarded her Ford Explorer, threw back the dripping hood of her raincoat, and drove home by way of familiar suburban streets on which the foul weather had settled a strangeness, an apocalyptic gloom that matched her mood.”
The power words at one level or another are boarded, threw, dripping, familiar, foul, settled, strangeness, apocalyptic, gloom.
Using those power words, that sentence is fantastic characterization, mood setting, emotion, and depth in a dozen advanced ways. It is also a transition, moving the character from one point to another quickly without white space or other dull ways.
So a younger professional writer (or a stage four writer wanting a different feel) would write that sentence without power words like this…
“She got into her Ford Explorer, pushed back the hood of her raincoat and drove home through suburban streets that the weather made seem gloomy, which fit her mood.”
Nothing at all wrong with that. Clear communication, a tiny bit of character, and a transition sentence.
But now read Koontz’s out loud, then read the regular writer one out loud and you will see the difference.
Stage three writing, stage four writing. Difference is amazingly clear.
That’s why you study stage four writers when learning, instead of new writers who can write and tell a story just fine, at a base level.
And power words are just one small part of learning how to climb to the next level. You can’t do this from the front of your brain, don’t even try. Just takes millions of words and a lot of stories and a continued hunger to learn.
I just thought this would be a really fun and stark example between stage three writing and stage four writing. Thought you writers might enjoy it.